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My Tour of the Blood Center

In first grade my mom’s friend, Chris took me on a tour of the Mississippi Valley Regional Blood Center. I saw two men donate their own blood. After that I learned that just by donating blood you have saved four people’s lives. While you donate blood you can watch T.V. When you are done you can have a cookie and some juice. I saw lots of labs. There were many labs and in the labs there were machines that spin the blood and they get four things from the blood and they are … Red blood cells, plasma, platelet, and cryoprecipitate that is used as glue for in surgery. I saw the refrigerator that stores the blood and I also saw the freezer that stores the plasma. But my favorite things were going on the big bus, and getting Paula Platelet! Thanks Chris for an awesome tour Chris! It was a little scary but it was fun learning about all of the equipment! The End!

Arielle M.

Comments on: "My Tour of the Blood Center" (14)

  1. Diane Owens said:
    March 8, 2011 at 1:53 pm

    Excellent job, Arielle! I loved the details and I learned a lot. Your writing is very effective because it’s easy to read, easy to understand and it flows. Keep up the good work.

  2. Betsy Catour said:
    March 8, 2011 at 3:29 pm

    Very interesting. I really enjoyed it!

  3. Faith C. said:
    March 8, 2011 at 3:49 pm

    That is soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo coll arielle …. tell your mom that and my mom
    from Faith

  4. Mom said:
    March 8, 2011 at 5:56 pm

    Great job Arielle…this site is pretty cool! What are you going to write about next? Can I suggest something non-fiction for Women’s History Month? Love ya! Mom

  5. Luke said:
    March 8, 2011 at 8:07 pm

    goodjob arielle Ilike it

  6. Lauren said:
    March 8, 2011 at 8:55 pm

    I think it was sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooosooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooocool!!!!!!!!

  7. Matti said:
    March 14, 2011 at 11:46 am

    It was good ,but you shouldn’t say Thanks Chris it was a awesome tour Chris because you said chris like way to many times,but I loved it.It was interesting.

    • The Purple Pheonix said:
      August 31, 2011 at 9:51 am

      I agree, It was really great 😀 and less ‘chris’ and more pronouns would have made it better 😉

  8. Anonymous said:
    March 15, 2011 at 1:48 pm

    You mite not want to involve the discusting parts.

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